The tradition of families getting together to eat meals is disappearing . what are the reasons ?
In recent years , it has been noticed that family members are no longer doing get-togethers as they used to do
due to
various reasons such
as most individuals they
migrated and differences in beliefs. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, some people still practice such
a culture. In my own opinion , I would say it is very vital to have get together as it strengthens the family. This
essay will discuss further
the reasons .
Nowadays, public
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the public
are
migrating to other countries in search of greener pastures , Change the verb form
is
therefore
, swallowships are no longer happening . population will opt to send funds to their loved ones during holidays , celebrations and if there is an emergency thereby it will reduce the costs of transports
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transport
as well as
time since most of them will be busy . For example
, most Zimbabweans , evacuated to Great Britain in search of jobs , nonetheless
,the distance is huge approximately 25000 kilometres hence
individuals will decide not to attend family gatherings.
The indifference to cultural beliefs also
contributes to the disappearance of family meetings becauseAdd an article
the
family
have the human right to believe whatever religion they would like to Fix the agreement mistake
families
hence
, individuals have a variety of cultural faiths for example
, christianity
, Islam, Change the capitalization
Christianity
hindu
and traditional healers . Change the capitalization
Hindu
Although
it differs , some family members will decide not to interact with the opposite ones. For example
in Nigeria , it has been reported that about 90 per cent of family members do not even communicate because of witchcraft.
In conclusion, families no longer engage in get-togethers due to
various reasons such
as differences in culture believes
and the migration of society to other countries . In my own opinion , it is vital to have family meetings to a greater extent.Replace the word
cultural beliefs
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