The table shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

The table shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.
The table provides information about how unemployed individuals allocated their time to various activities in the UK
last
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year.
Overall
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, both men and women generally engaged in activities during the morning.
In addition
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, most people gave preference
doing
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to doing
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housework and shopping throughout both morning and afternoon.
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with
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with,
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morning, housework, shopping and job hunting were
three
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the three
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main recreational pursuits chosen by both genders.
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the proportion of unemployed females who did housework constituted 49%, that of males was significantly lower at 19%. In terms of shopping and hunting, the shares comprised higher figures for men and women, accounting for over 15%. All remaining activities were the least
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during the morning which was under 10% for each sex, except for gardening. Regarding
afternoon
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the afternoon
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, the figures comprised less preferable compared to the morning, which except for women’s home chores, all the shares were under 20%.
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, males who did not have any job opted for watching TV rather than other pursuits, constituting just 14%. Shopping and visiting took the second place in terms of females’ activity at 17%
whereas
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gardening was the following pastime which most unemployed men had particular interest
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