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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their salary ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their salary ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares the proportion of
households
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 in the US by their yearly salary in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, the number of
households
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 who made a profit above $100,000 rose in these 3
years
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.
On the other hand
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, the population of people who had an income less than $25,000 fluctuated in the period given. It is obvious,
US
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that US
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households
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 who had an income between $25,000 and $50,000 did not change dramatically.
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, we can see less than 15 million of the
households
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 in these three
years
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 had an earning between $75,000 and $100,000. It can
also
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 be obtained from the chart that the number of families who had
a
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revenue between $50,000 and $75,000 in these 3
years
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 stayed steady
around
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 20 million family groups.
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,
while
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 the number of richest
households
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 in the US increased significantly, the proportion of families with lower annual income stayed stable in all three
years
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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