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In many countries, plastic containers have become more common than ever and by used by many food and drinks companies. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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Plastic
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packages
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 are commonly used in the
food
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 and
drinks
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 manufacturing industry.
This
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 essay will describe both the positive and negative sides of using
plastic
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 and In my opinion advantages are more than its
diadvantages
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disadvantages
advantages
. On the one hand, the packets, which are produced from
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plastic
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the plastic
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 can easily be used to pack any
food
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 and
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drink
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drinks
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drink
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 item.
This
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 type of packing ensures better
storing
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 of products.
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, any processed
food
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 and any soft drink can be preserved in normal temperatures for up to one year
also
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 without any problem.
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,
Plastic
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packages
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 are more convenient to handle.
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,
such
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 handling makes the delivery
Process
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process
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 smooth and operation friendly because of
non-fragile
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its non-fragile
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 Properties.
Finaly
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Finally
 labels can easily be inserted over packets, which helps the companies in their marketing.
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, one of the main drawbacks of
plastic
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package
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packages
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 is,
it
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that it
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 is not reusable, which is not at all
financial
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financially
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 friendly for a
company
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. As
plastic
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Packages
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 can be used only once, companies have to make new packets every time for new
Products Packing
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product packing
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.
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, a
company
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loss
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loses
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 a huge amount of money for packing only.
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, soft
drinks
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 like
Cocacola
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Coca-Cola
 and Pepsi can use
Plastic
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bottle
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bottles
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 only once and after drinking those are thrown away.
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, plastics are not disposable to
soil
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, that makes a bad impact on
environment
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the environment
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.
consequently
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, the industry related to
food
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 and
drinks
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are
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is
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 Paying a huge penalty for
such
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packages
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, which is a direct loss
a
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apply
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for a
company
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.
To conclude
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,
although
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usage
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the usage
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 of
plastic
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 has
drawback
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drawbacks
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 lite financial loss for
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company
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the company
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.
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, I believe the positive sides are more like convenient packing and handling
system
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systems
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.
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Introduction clarity
Make sure your introduction directly addresses the question and provides a clear statement of your view on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Evidence and examples
For a higher band score, try to provide more balanced and specific examples for both advantages and disadvantages to clearly demonstrate your argument.
Sentence variety
Work on varying your sentence structures to enhance readability and engage the reader more effectively.
Grammar and accuracy
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Structure
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Linking words
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Position clarity
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