The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.

The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.
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The given bar charts illustrate extensive information regarding the percentages of individuals who prefer to watch
reality
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shows or
game
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shows in terms of gender and age in Australia.
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, it is apparent that people who are over 45 have a great superiority in both
reality
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shows and
game
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shows,
whereas
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the number of
game
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show watchers is almost the same. A more precise juxtaposition of data reveals that the number of TV programme watchers who are 16-24 and 45+ are the same for each genre with around 50% and 70%, respectively. TV customers who prefer
reality
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shows accounted for 67% and exceeded
game
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shows by a margin of 30%.
Game
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shows ranked in the
last
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place with just under 40%. Turning to the gender of TV users, there is an
overall
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superiority of women for
reality
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shows with 70% which is approximately 2 times higher than men in
reality
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shows. The male and female watchers of
game
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shows are the same at about 60%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words reality, game with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 11 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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