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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The table shows the three
sources
 (national government, local taxes,
other
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and other
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sources
) and the total amount in one area of the UK police
budget
 for 2017 and 2018.
While the
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The
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 pie chart illustrates the percentages of three different money uses in 2017 and 2018 (wages, technology, construction, and transportation). Units are measured in British
Pound
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pounds
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.
Overall
, the highest
source
 in one area of the UK for the police
budget
 in 2017 and 2018 was the national government, and the lowest
source
 was other
sources
 (grants). Salaries were the top
source
 of money spending in both 2017 and 2018. Technology was the least expensive method in both 2017 and 2018.
To begin
 with the table, in the year 2017, the National Government as the largest
source
 of the political
budget
 was 175.5m and it continued as the largest
source
 of the political
budget
 in 2018 at 177.8m. The Other
sources
had been
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found the lowest police
budget
 in both 2017 and 2018, at 38m and 38.5m respectively. In total, the amount from the three
sources
 in 2017 was 304.7 and it increased to 318.6m in 2018. The pie chart,
on the other hand
, shows that there was a considerable portion of
this
budget
 is used to pay the salaries of officers and staff, which was 75
percent
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per cent
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 in 2017 and fell to 69
percent
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per cent
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 in 2018. As for the
budget
 spent on
the
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‘Technology’, it was 8
percent
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per cent
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 in 2017 and went up 6
percent
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per cent
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 to 14
percent
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per cent
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 in 2018. The category of ‘Buildings and transport’ provided 17
percent
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per cent
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 of the
budget
 each year.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, budget, source, m, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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