The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014

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The line graph illustrates the average monthly cost fluctuations of Copper,

Nickel

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Zinc

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and Zinc

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2014.

Overall

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, all three metals displayed a significant downward trend first 6

months

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Subsequently

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, other half of the year they experienced growth gradually. When we look at the chart it is revealed that ,

Nickel

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prices experienced the most significant decline in

first

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the first

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three

months

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of the year , which after had dipped again in May to -4%.

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, by July it experienced a sharp increase by growing 3%. Followed

months

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Nickel

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remained stable at -1% . By the end of the

year

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year,

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nickel

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demonstrated some fluctuations and ended at 1

percent

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On the other hand

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, there is Zinc ,

that

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which

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after a significant jump to 3

percent

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fell gradually by 3

percent

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. Followed

months

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zinc displayed a slight growth till September. By

the

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apply

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October it experienced

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rapid growth to 2

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percent

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per cent

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However

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, Copper remained steady over an anniversary by experiencing only 1 fluctuation in June ,

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which grew

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grew

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growing

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slightly to 3

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percent

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per cent

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "subsequently".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words nickel, months, percent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "displayed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

172 words

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average monthly change
prices of metals
trend
spike
fluctuation
increase
decrease
sharp rise
sharp fall
stability
volatility
data points
comparison
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external factors
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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014

Scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artist. To what extent do you agree?

You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter ● explain why you changed jobs ● describe your new job ● tell him/her your other news.

Some people say that humanitarian subjects such as philosophy, history and literature that people study in universities have no value for their future career. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant examples.

Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.