The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014
The line graph illustrates the average monthly cost fluctuations of Copper,
Nickel
, Zinc
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and Zinc
by
2014.
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in
Overall
, all three metals displayed a significant downward trend first 6 months
. Subsequently
, other half of the year they experienced growth gradually.
When we look at the chart it is revealed that , Nickel
prices experienced the most significant decline in first
three Correct article usage
the first
months
of the year , which after had dipped again in May to -4%. Subsequently
, by July it experienced a sharp increase by growing 3%. Followed months
Nickel
remained stable at -1% . By the end of the year
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year,
nickel
demonstrated some fluctuations and ended at 1 percent
.
On the other hand
, there is Zinc , that
after a significant jump to 3 Correct word choice
which
percent
fell gradually by 3 percent
. Followed months
zinc displayed a slight growth till September. By the
October it experienced Correct article usage
apply
a
rapid growth to 2 Remove the article
apply
percent
.
Change the spelling
per cent
However
, Copper remained steady over an anniversary by experiencing only 1 fluctuation in June , Correct pronoun usage
which grew
grew
slightly to 3 Wrong verb form
growing
percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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