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The charts below show the main reasons why students chose a particular university in the UK, in 1997 and 2007.

The chart gives information on the main purposes why students select a particular
universities
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university
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 in the UK, in 1997 and 2007.
Overall
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, when suitable degree courses were dominant, good sports and social activities were the lowest. The quality of the resources
were
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apply
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choosen
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chosen
 by students
were
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was
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 about 21 %, but it was followed by a considerable drop to 17 % in 2007. The suitable degree courses
was
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were
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 about 35 %, and they increased slightly to 37 % over a decade. The close to parental home was about 10 %, and it was followed by a dramatic
grow
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 to 22 % in 2007. The quality of teaching selected by learners
about
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was about
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 15 %, and it
was
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apply
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increased slightly to 18 % in 2007.
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, when it comes to the good sports and social activities
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,
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they were followed by a considerable drop to 6 % in 2007.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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