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The graph below gives information about the number of estimated cars from 2020 to 2035. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the number of estimated cars from 2020 to 2035. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph depicts the number
in
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of
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hundred
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hundreds
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 of
thousand
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thousands
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of
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cars in many countries
manufactured
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from 2020 to 2035. To overview, UK, Japan and USA
car
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 manufactured shows a downward trend
while
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 China's number of
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car
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cars
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eastimated
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estimated
estimate
 shows
a
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an
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 upward trend. From 2020,
the
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apply
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China
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China's
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car
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 manufacturing increased slightly which was started from 100 cars and it will reach almost 150 in 2035.
Besides
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, in
Japan
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Japan,
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this
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 cars number will gradually decrease and in 2035 it will
nearly
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be nearly
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 2 hundred.
Furthermore
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, the UK manufacturing
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car
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cars
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 was 200 hundred in 2020 and
until
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by
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 2025 it will
slowdown
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slow down
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 slightly but from 2025 to 2035 it will dramatically decrease
and
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apply
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that
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will around 300.
On the other hand
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 , from 2020 to 2025
japanies
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Japanese
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car
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cars
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 increase step by step which is over 300 and
2030
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in 2030
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 it will follow a downward trend which may
around
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be around
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 300 and over the next 5
year
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years
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 it will reach approximately below 100.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • estimated
  • projection
  • statistical
  • to soar
  • to fluctuate
  • steady
  • noteworthy
  • incremental
  • exponential
  • forecast
  • saturate
  • plateau
  • peak
  • trend
  • implications
  • automotive industry
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