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Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening Do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society

#robots #intelligence #humans #workplace #impact #society
In the digital age, automatic products
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intelligence
 soared and gradually
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 responsibilities
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 in the work areas. The primary reason
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business managers have a
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tendency
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 robots for heavy
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. In light of
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 contend that
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 trend has
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beneficial
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 of production and
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 physical toils to the cliff. It is important to acknowledge that
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 perspective on physical
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enforcement
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 low,
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 counterpart position in
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 of society. Their advantages are undeniable and unexpected , they can do works which human seems like hardly ever do the same,
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professional
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 people's day. Japan is now running
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mass mechanized
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 restaurants
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 allowed to order automatically without any man-made steps.
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 networks and machines, the priority of wisdom
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increasinglyobvious
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increasingly obvious
, it may lead to
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higher
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about
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 education. In fact, with
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 technology, physical
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 sources gradually do not exist. anymore
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mechanic engines will ensure productivity perfectly.
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owners can run facilities inside through voice or smartphones and even turn on a horn without any security whenever burglars break into the house.
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considerable pressure on low-awareness citizens,
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 abilities to form a better future that can boost productivity and modernize
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Language Use
Try to avoid spelling and grammatical errors to improve clarity. For instance, 'automatic products suchs as' could be corrected to 'such as' and 'intelligent retrieval has the counterpart position in eyes of society' can be clarified for better understanding.
Logical Structure
Enhance the clarity of your main ideas by structuring your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This structure helps to guide the reader through your argument.
Supported Main Points
Incorporate specific examples and details to support your points. While you mention 'mass mechanized restaurants in Japan,' providing more concrete information or statistics can strengthen your argument.
Coherence
Ensure that each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence that outlines the main idea of the paragraph. This will enhance the overall coherence of the essay.
Language Use
Consider refining the use of complex sentence structures to enhance the fluency of your writing. Practicing compound and complex sentences can aid in delivering your ideas more effectively.
Task Achievement
You engaged with the topic and provided clear opinions on the impact of robotics and AI on society, demonstrating good task achievement.
Relevant Specific Examples
You made an effort to provide examples, such as 'mass mechanized restaurants in Japan,' to support your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Cost-effective
  • Innovation
  • Technological advancements
  • Job displacement
  • Economic disparity
  • Dependency
  • Cyber-attacks
  • Ethical concerns
  • Moral questions
  • Standard of living
  • Income gap
  • Widespread automation
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