Restoration of old buildings in main cities involves enormous government expenditure. It would be more beneficial to spend this money to build new houses and roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

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It is believed that the government should allocate their spending
for
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building new
facilities
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in key urban
centers
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rather than repairing old
buildings
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. I will show my support for
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idea in
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essay. The opponents of
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viewpoint often exaggerate the advantages that repairing and restoring old
buildings
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offer.
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is because demolition and dismantling of old
buildings
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can create a lot of dust and constructive waste released into the environment, causing increasingly worsened environmental pollution in urban
centers
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, especially
the
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air pollution.
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,
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perspective fails to consider the huge
cost
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of repair and restoration of old
buildings
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which are not a one-time
cost
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, as these activities require constant maintenance costs including structures, designs, and visuals.
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is particularly true in the case of a lot of old apartments in Vietnam which need maintenance annually to ensure residents’ safety and these apartments’ visuals, leading to the waste of money but effective not high.
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, the government’s investing in new
facilities
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can offer long-term benefits, as new
facilities
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require less maintenance
cost
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and operating
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cost
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with longer life expectancy, offering long-term
cost
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saving
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savings
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for the government and individuals.
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, investing in new
buildings
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and new
facilities
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can advance city
infrastructure
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, because
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allows for the integration of modern
infrastructure
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including saving-energy systems, smart technologies, and sustainable design methods.
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not only improves features and quality of
facilities
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but
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contributes to the development of a more resilient and advanced urban
infrastructure
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system. A perfect example
for
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this
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is Vinhome Ocean Park, a smart urban area in Vietnam, which is designed at modern building standards including energy-saving systems,
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and environment-friendly
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technologies, creating a safe and sustainable habitat for residents
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contributing to a modern and flexible urban
infrastructure
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system. In conclusion,
although
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repairing and restoring old
buildings
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can benefit the environment, I purposefully advocate that the government should invest in constructing new
facilities
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due to
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the long-term
cost
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savings and the development of city
infrastructure
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.
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