*QUESTION* There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. *Do the advantages* of having a small family rather than a large family *outweighs* *the disadvantages ?*
Nowadays a tendency
are
Change the verb form
is
showed
Wrong verb form
shown
that
Change preposition
to
having
a smaller family rather than Wrong verb form
have
large
family. The primary advantages are limited budgets and everyone's Add an article
a large
priority
. This
advantages overweight the drawbacks.
Correct pronoun usage
These
Firstly
, being a small family it's easy to make budgets. In present
where the price of everything Add an article
a present
increases
gradually and living Wrong verb form
is increasing
space
getting smaller than past, it is impossible to handle a large family especially when Fix the agreement mistake
spaces
earning
member is one person. A small family make a proper Correct article usage
an earning
budgets
which is bearable for the earning Correct the article-noun agreement
budget
member
and they can easily move on in their future. Fix the agreement mistake
members
For instance
, a family with members
monthly cost is lower than a large Change noun form
members'
member's
families
monthly cost which is affordable for a member who Change noun form
family's
earn
money.
Change the verb form
earns
Furthermore
, it is complex
situation to give Add an article
a complex
priority
to all members. It is not possible that
every Correct word choice
for
mber
Correct your spelling
member
in
a large family Change preposition
of
getting
Change the verb form
to get
same
Correct article usage
the same
priority
. For example
, a mother does not give same
attention when she has 5 children but she definitely Correct article usage
the same
give
the same Change the verb form
gives
priority
when she has only one or two children. Besides
, in a large family
everyone should not get the chance to reveal their ideas or their desire properly Add a comma
family,
while
in a small family
it is quite sure that each one Add a comma
family,
hear
Change the verb form
hears
others
ideas.
In conclusion, Change noun form
others'
other's
therefore
it is clear that
a small family overweight the advantages than
a large family where the budget is friendly and comfortable Change preposition
over
as well
as
everyone Correct word choice
and
get
the same Change the verb form
gets
priority
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Grammar and Tense Consistency
Ensure that the essay adheres to proper grammar and tense usage throughout. For example, 'Nowadays a tendency are showed' could be rephrased to 'Nowadays, there is a tendency to favor having a smaller family over a large one.'
Incorporate Specific Examples
Focus on providing specific examples or data to bolster your arguments. While the essay does make references to hypothetical situations, incorporating real-world statistics or studies could further strengthen your points.
Clarity and Pronoun Usage
Ensure clarity in expressing ideas by avoiding repetitive statements and closely monitoring pronoun use. For instance, avoiding repetition in mentioning budgetary advantages or making clearer distinctions between family members' roles and perspectives could enhance clarity.
Argument Structure
You've effectively outlined the advantages of having a small family, framing your arguments around budget management and attention distribution.
Essay Structure
The essay maintains a clear structure, with a recognizable introduction, body paragraphs focusing on different points, and a conclusion that reiterates the main idea.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...