*QUESTION* There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. *Do the advantages* of having a small family rather than a large family *outweighs* *the disadvantages ?*

Nowadays a tendency
are
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showed
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that
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having
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a smaller family rather than
large
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a large
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family. The primary advantages are limited budgets and everyone's
priority
.
This
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advantages overweight the drawbacks.
Firstly
, being a small family it's easy to make budgets. In
present
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where the price of everything
increases
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gradually and living
space
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getting smaller than past, it is impossible to handle a large family especially when
earning
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an earning
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member is one person. A small family make a proper
budgets
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budget
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which is bearable for the earning
member
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members
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and they can easily move on in their future.
For instance
, a family with
members
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members'
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monthly cost is lower than a large
families
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family's
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monthly cost which is affordable for a member who
earn
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money.
Furthermore
, it is
complex
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situation to give
priority
to all members. It is not possible
that
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for
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every
mber
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member
in
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of
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a large family
getting
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to get
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same
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the same
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priority
.
For example
, a mother does not give
same
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the same
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attention when she has 5 children but she definitely
give
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the same
priority
when she has only one or two children.
Besides
, in a large
family
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family,
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everyone should not get the chance to reveal their ideas or their desire properly
while
in a small
family
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family,
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it is quite sure that each one
hear
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others
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others'
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ideas. In conclusion,
therefore
it is clear that
a small family overweight the advantages
than
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over
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a large family where the budget is friendly and comfortable
as well
as
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and
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everyone
get
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the same
priority
.
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Grammar and Tense Consistency
Ensure that the essay adheres to proper grammar and tense usage throughout. For example, 'Nowadays a tendency are showed' could be rephrased to 'Nowadays, there is a tendency to favor having a smaller family over a large one.'
Incorporate Specific Examples
Focus on providing specific examples or data to bolster your arguments. While the essay does make references to hypothetical situations, incorporating real-world statistics or studies could further strengthen your points.
Clarity and Pronoun Usage
Ensure clarity in expressing ideas by avoiding repetitive statements and closely monitoring pronoun use. For instance, avoiding repetition in mentioning budgetary advantages or making clearer distinctions between family members' roles and perspectives could enhance clarity.
Argument Structure
You've effectively outlined the advantages of having a small family, framing your arguments around budget management and attention distribution.
Essay Structure
The essay maintains a clear structure, with a recognizable introduction, body paragraphs focusing on different points, and a conclusion that reiterates the main idea.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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