The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph depicted above provides the monthly average price fluctuations of
copper
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, nickel and zinc throughout the
year
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2014. From an
overall
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perspective, we can observe that all metals experienced a decrease
initially
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in the first 4-5 months.
However
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, in the
last
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3-2 months of the
year
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, all metals’ prices returned to soar. Nickel exhibited the highest percentage in January, followed by a continuous decrease in the subsequent months until it rose again in July, maintaining stability until September.
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, nickel experienced a slight decline in October before showing an increase in November, which the figure maintained until the end of the
year
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. Almost identical,
copper
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denoted a progressive decline until May and remained stagnant until June. In the following
month
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month,
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copper
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slightly rose and remained stable until September. During October and
November
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November,
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copper
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experienced a stable decline and showed a tiny
raise
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rise
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in December.
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, zinc began the
year
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with the lowest percentage and wrapped up the
year
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with the highest position among all metals.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words copper, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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