Write about the following topic: In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Across the globe,
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the unemplyment
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unemplyment
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unemployment
rate is growing day by day.
This
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eassy
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essay
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argues that there are many literate
person
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people
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available whose graduation
level
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levels
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are higher than many average
people
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and yet not getting
ant
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a
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job
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. The two main reasons
of
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for
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this
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problem are lack of practical
experience
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and not fulfilling the requirements of
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job
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the job
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market
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. First and foremost, most of the student's target is to get the certificate from the institution just to get a
job
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which is the main reason
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for not
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getting the real skill by completing graduation that the
job
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market
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needs.
Aditionally
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,
graduation
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a graduation
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certificate is just a show off for
the
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apply
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students nowadays to get some respect in
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society which is
reallly
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really
not
valueable
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valuable
if they don't apply the
thing
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things
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they learned in their practical life.
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, a higher proportion of unemployed
peoples
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people
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blame the government for
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problem
whereas
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they are mostly responsible for their own lackings which is like the
people
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who can't dance, but
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the floor for that.
Secondly
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,
major
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a major
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part of unemployed
people
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thinks
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think
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that just a higher level certificate is needed to get a good
job
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by not researching the
job
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market
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.
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, they just deny the
job
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of lower salary & the opportunity of having an unpaid internship.
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, they are not concerned about their future which makes them
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the opportunity of gaining
experince
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experience
on their own.
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,
nearlly
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nearly
all of the company with high
salary
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salaries
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requires
minimum
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a minimum
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2
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of 2
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years of
job
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experience
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which is not suitable for
the
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apply
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people
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who aren't eager to gain
experience
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from a
low salary
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low-salary
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providing
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apply
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company.
To conclude
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, lack of
experience
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in their
job
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field and not matching the profile of the
job
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market
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required are the main reasons
of
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for
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not getting jobs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic downturns
  • qualified graduates
  • employment generation
  • academic qualifications
  • practical experience
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeship programs
  • entrepreneurship
  • education reform
  • continuous learning
  • technological advancements
  • skill development
  • job market
  • skill gap
  • policy reform
  • subsidies
  • emerging sectors
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