The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information abouth the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The graph shows
percentage
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the percentage
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of
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population
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the population
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who lived in cities of
South-east
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Southeast
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Asian countries including
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia,
Thailand
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, and Indonesia from 1970 to 2020,
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also
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the predictions for 2030 to 2040.
Overall
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, people who lived in cities from 1970 to 2020
are
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increased
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the predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Population
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from 1970 to 1990
was
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grew in four countries but there
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difference
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trends from 1990 to 2000.
While
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population
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the population
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in Indonesia and Malaysia
was
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increased in 1990,
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population
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the population
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in
Thailand
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and
Phillipines
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the Phillipines
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went to the
otherside
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other side
, decreasing. In 2010, people who
live
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lived
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in
town
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the town
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of
Phillipines
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Philippines
boosted
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were boosted
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until 2020.
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,
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population
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the population
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who lived in towns
of
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in
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Thailand
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from 1990 to 2020
was
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increased
unsignificantly
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significantly
. The most significant growth will
be
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occured
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occur
in
Thailand
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among other countries
refer
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referring
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to predictions for 2030 to 2040.
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