The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in Scotland for twenty years ago and last year.

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of electricity produced by different energy sources in Scotland for 20 years ago compared to

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coal. As can be seen from the chart, 20 years ago gas source was almost a quarter(22.3%),

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almost one out of five(19.6%)

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26.4 per

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. Turning to the percentage of the hydro natural flow, 20 years ago

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given period of time the lowest percentage of energy was generated by the oil. 2.1 per

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The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in Scotland for twenty years ago and last year.

The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuel should be the most important global priority today. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

: For many , shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others . People , however, in the past mostly visited shopping malls when necessary . To what extent do you think this is a negative trend?

You are planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend. •Describe the vacation spot you have chosen . •Explain how you plan to spend time there. •Invite your friend to join on your vacation

Traditions are about the past and innovation is about the future, and it has been argued that we need to let go of traditions for the sake of progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? What role should traditions have in our lives?