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The line graph shows that how much carbon dioxide (CO2) was produced and its average amount per person in four countries, namely, the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.

The line graph shows that how much carbon dioxide (CO2) was produced and its average amount per person in four countries, namely, the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
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how much carbon dioxide (CO2) was produced and its average amount per person in four countries, namely, the United Kingdom,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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, the figure
of
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 carbon dioxide emissions for Italy and Portugal increased during the whole
period
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, despite
of
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being the lowest point at the beginning of the
period
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, 1-4
tons
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while
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 the
UK
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 and
Sweden
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 showed a decrease until 2007.
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 to that, the
UK
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 owned the highest point among others in the whole
period
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. Measuring the highest and the lowest rate of CO2 emissions per person at the beginning of the
period
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, in 1967, there were about 11
tons
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CO2
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of CO2
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 in the
UK
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whereas
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 Portugal witnessed only over 1 ton. The share of the
UK
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 declined by about 3
tons
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 until the end of the
period
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,
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, people in Portugal emitted much more CO2 increasing to its highest level
6
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of 6
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tons
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 in 2007. Looking at the details for
Sweden
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 and Italy, the former showed 8
tons
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 as twice
much
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 as Italy, 4
tons
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.
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,
share
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the share
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 of
Sweden
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 went down to over 5
tons
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 in 2007, reaching its highest point to over 10
tons
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 in the first decade, in 1977. Contrasting to Italy, its figure increased to under 8
tons
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 during the
period
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 between 1967 and 2007.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words co, sweden, period, tons, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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