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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparison where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the vehicles of
people
Use synonyms
go
Correct pronoun usage
who go
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 to
work
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 and the cause of of
this
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.
Overall
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, the first chart shows the reasons why
people
Use synonyms
 go to
work
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 by bicycle. And
conversely
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, the second chart gives reasons for those who drive to
work
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. The highest percentage of those who favour cycling say that because
of
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apply
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cycling is good for health and reduces emissions
so
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apply
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they tend to cycle. The figure for both reasons by the same at 30%. Meanwhile, the proportion of those who think there is not enough parking for cars is halved compared to those who cycle. Surprisingly, there is a small
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 who think biking a cycle to go to
work
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 is faster than driving and does not waste costs , respectively at 12% and 13%
In contrast
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 to
this
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, the percentage who prefer to travel by car because it is more comfortable is 40%. The figure for working distance ranked second at 21%. And the
people
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 who usually need to carry some of their kinds of stuff to their company or feel driving is faster than cycling are the same point at 14%. And the
last
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 lowest one, 11% of
people
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 who feel driving is less accident than cycling
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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