The graphs below illustrate the gadgets individuals in the 18 to 25 age categories utilized to watch TV channels in Canada in 2009 and 2019.

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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of devices

people

between the ages of 18 to 25 years old utilized to watch

programs in Canada in the years 2009 and 2019.

According to

the information, it can be seen that the conventional

is the most popular choice compared to the other gadgets in 2009.

However

people

in 2019

choose

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the mobile phone and the flat-screen

as their main resources. In 2009,

people

between 18 to 25 age selected the conventional

to watch the programs which was occupied by 34%. Lapton came the second place with 20%.

Moreover

the

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tablet

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tablets

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and flat-screen

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TVs

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were not popular at that time, only 5% and 8% respectively.

On the other hand

, both flat-screen

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TVs

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and mobile

phone

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phones

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were the best choices for

this

group of

people

, with about 27% and 26%, almost the same amount of usage.

While

the conventional

dropped to only 4%. The desktop computer was used to watch

channels at 12% same as the laptop.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, tv with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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169 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

illustrate
gadgets
utilized
age categories
watching TV channels
comparison
popularity
notable trends
increase/decrease
devices
decade
advancements in technology
user preferences
speculation
future trends
conclusion
implications
technology and media companies
lifestyle
habits
target age group

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Some parents buy their kids a large number of toys to play with.What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having lot of toys.

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