The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and ,are comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart compares
to
Change preposition
apply
change
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changes
habits
to Change preposition
in habits
buy
online goods in four Wrong verb form
buying
section
including, film/music, books, Change to a plural noun
sections
clothes
and travel in 2003 and 2013, over a decade in individual
country, New Zealand, Add an article
an individual
overall
spending on cultural items started to dominate the sector
in 2013 whereas
clothes
and travel was the leader of the sector
in 2003.
The money of spending
on books and film/music was 19% and 22% Wrong verb form
spent
respectivetly
in 2003 Correct your spelling
respectively
although
after
ten years later, it Change preposition
apply
has
changed to 55% Unnecessary verb
apply
collectivetly
which means they started to dominate the retail Correct your spelling
collectively
sector
in New Zealand.
On the other hand
, tourism was the biggest expanditure
in 2003, Correct your spelling
expenditure
accounted
for 37% , which experienced a significant fall to 29% in 2013. Wrong verb form
accounting
Clothes
witnessed same
decrease trend, Correct article usage
the same
whereas
in retail
Correct article usage
the retail
sector
22% part of spending belonged to
clothing, in 2013 Change preposition
on
this
was
increased to 16%, in 2003 Unnecessary verb
apply
clothes
and film/music had same
sales figures and they were in Correct article usage
the same
top
second expenditure in 2003 Correct article usage
the top
this
was changed in 2013 moreover
, clothes
was
dropped the Change the verb form
were
last
rank on spending online.Submitted by begumyildiz on
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