Write a letter to your landlord to ask about repair work that was not completed successfully. Write What the problem was What the repairs did What you expect

Dear Mr. Jason, I am writing to inform you about the maintenance team that you sent yesterday.
However
, they were not able to finish the things that
needs
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to be repaired in my apartment.
To begin
with, they were informed about the things that
needs
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to be repaired a week before their arrival but
according to
them
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them,
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they forgot to bring some items that they
need
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for repair
such
as
bulb
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and doorknob.
In addition
to that, they came 20 minutes late for their appointment. I clearly mentioned
on
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the email the things that
needs
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to be repaired,
such
as
,
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kitchen lights, door knob, leak on the ceiling and kitchen drainage.
However
,
due to
their
negligence
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they left without fixing everything. I hope that
this
issue will be resolved immediately as I am not comfortable
to stay
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in the apartment
with
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this
kind of situation. Sincerely yours, Ana
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Task Achievement
To strengthen your letter, consider directly stating your expectations for resolution at the end. For example, you could request a specific timeline for when the repairs will be completed or suggest a follow-up meeting to discuss the issue further.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance the cohesion of your paragraphs by using more varied and explicit linking words or phrases to connect your ideas more clearly. For instance, when transitioning between describing the problem and the actions of the maintenance team, phrases like 'Despite informing them in advance, they…' could add clarity.
Task Achievement
You have outlined the problem and the incomplete repairs effectively, providing clear details of the issue at hand.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter is structured well, with a polite opening and closing, and each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of the problem, which assists in the logical flow of information.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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