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You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter •say that you liked his/her photos of your family •ask him/her to be your photographer at a special family event •give him/her the details of the event.

#photos #photographer #•say #•ask #event #•give
Hello
mr
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Mr
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 Alex I hope my letter finds you well, I would like to tell you that I have been to my parent's house
last
 week, and during our
chat
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 we
have
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have to
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 look
photos
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the photos
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 have taken by you, to be honest, it was really amazing pictures, We love it, thanks for nice memories. Please allow me to request you to be our photographer
at
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30th
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the 30th
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 wedding anniversary of my parents,
Actually
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this
 is our gift to them. We are
planing
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planning
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 to
be held
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this
 event on the 25th of May
on
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at
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Hilton
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the Hilton
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hotel
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, the main hall, so I am waiting for your reply. Thanks in advance. Best regards
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style
Consider starting your letter with a formal or warm greeting, such as 'Dear Mr. Alex,' to enhance the tone of politeness and professionalism.
structure
For better coherence, organize your information more clearly by using separate paragraphs for different topics, such as expressing gratitude, making a request, and providing event details.
grammar
Ensure your letter is free from grammatical errors and try to use a range of sentence structures for a higher score. Proofreading can help identify and correct these mistakes.
content
Try to be specific in your compliments about the photographs, as this adds a personal touch and makes your praise more convincing.
content
Your letter clearly conveys your satisfaction with the previous service and politely requests the same service for an upcoming event, which is excellent for task achievement.
content
You've successfully included all the necessary details about the event, ensuring the recipient has enough information to respond appropriately.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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