In many developing nation, the rush to become industrialized has created major problems with air and water quality. What are the problems that this has brought about and offer some solutions to these problems?

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Task Achievement

Task completion could be improved by addressing both parts of the question more directly. Consider starting with a clear thesis statement that directly responds to the prompt.

Task Achievement

For a higher score in Task Achievement, ensure that your response thoroughly explores both the problems and suggested solutions, offering specific examples and elaborations.

Coherence & Cohesion

To enhance coherence, use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader through your discussion.

Coherence & Cohesion

Improve cohesion by using a variety of linking words and phrases to more clearly connect your ideas and arguments.

General

Proofread your essay for minor grammatical errors and typos, as correcting these can help improve the clarity of your message.

Introduction

You've successfully introduced the topic and indicated a dual focus on problems and solutions, which is commendable.

Task Attempt

Your willingness to cover both sides of the issue—problems and solutions—shows an attempt to fully respond to the task.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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Topic Vocabulary:

accelerated
deteriorated
respiratory diseases
untreated industrial waste
aquatic life
biodiversity
habitat destruction
ecosystems
extinction
urbanization
overcrowding
stricter environmental regulations
sustainable
green technologies
renewable energy sources
fossil fuels
waste management
contamination
vehicular pollution
conservation

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In many developing nation, the rush to become industrialized has created major problems with air and water quality. What are the problems that this has brought about and offer some solutions to these problems?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourist who visit such places?

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