In many developing nation, the rush to become industrialized has created major problems with air and water quality. What are the problems that this has brought about and offer some solutions to these problems?

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Task Achievement
Task completion could be improved by addressing both parts of the question more directly. Consider starting with a clear thesis statement that directly responds to the prompt.
Task Achievement
For a higher score in Task Achievement, ensure that your response thoroughly explores both the problems and suggested solutions, offering specific examples and elaborations.
Coherence & Cohesion
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Coherence & Cohesion
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Introduction
You've successfully introduced the topic and indicated a dual focus on problems and solutions, which is commendable.
Task Attempt
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accelerated
  • deteriorated
  • respiratory diseases
  • untreated industrial waste
  • aquatic life
  • biodiversity
  • habitat destruction
  • ecosystems
  • extinction
  • urbanization
  • overcrowding
  • stricter environmental regulations
  • sustainable
  • green technologies
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • waste management
  • contamination
  • vehicular pollution
  • conservation
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