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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduates degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of Anthropology
graduates
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 who engaged in six different categories of jobs after completing their undergraduate degree. The table demonstrates the amount of money which was earned by the anthropologists after five years.
According to
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 the pie chart, more than half of Anthropology
graduates
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 took a full-time work. It is obvious that part-time work
along with
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 the postgrad study category had the least popularity among
graduates
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.
Moreover
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, “not known” and “full-time postgrad study” were equally popular. With regard to the table, half of
graduates
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 who were employed by the government sector made the highest amount of money after 5 years,
whereas
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 anthropologists who worked for private companies had the lowest salaries during the same time. With reference to the pie chart, 52% of Anthropology
graduates
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 worked full-time. The figures for the not known and full-time postgrad study categories were equal at 8%.
Furthermore
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, the percentage of
graduates
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 who were part-timers or postgraduate students stood at 5%. As for the table, 50% of
graduates
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 who were deployed by the government sector earned the largest amount of money.
However
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, just 30 % of the employees who worked for private companies received the highest salaries after 5 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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