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The bar chart below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010.
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The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 various
proportion
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proportions
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 among estates in three different countries from 2007 to 2010.
it is clear that
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,
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apply
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Use synonyms
Algeria
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 proportions have a downward trend
while
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,
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 chines properties experience an upward trend at the same time. As can be seen, in 2007
Algeria
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 with over 6% stayed at
first
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the first
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 stage, Argentina was
at
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in
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second
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 degree
by
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at
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 3% and
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finally
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china
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China
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 showed third stage with 2%. In
next
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the next
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 year,2008,
Algeria
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 saw a remarkable drop from over 6% to4.5%
whereas
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, china
surge
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 to over 4% and
follow
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this
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 way by a noticeable increase to 5.3% in 2009 and another moderate rise
had
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showed
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 over 6% in 2010
however
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, reduction mode continued for
Algeria
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 with a marked dipped by about 1.5% from 4.5% to 3% in 2009 and stood at a same level in 3% with a negligible growth which was under 0.1% in 2010. Argentina vary between 4.8% to1.2% from 2007 to 2010. During
first
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 year, it
was
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showed
significant
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a significant
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climbed
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by
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 over 1.5% and
then
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 experienced a dramatic
fell
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 from 4.8% to 1.3% in
second
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 year. In 2010, Argentina rose to 2.3% moderately. The bar chart below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words algeria with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage growth
  • average property prices
  • economic conditions
  • real estate market
  • year-to-year growth rate
  • government policies
  • international events
  • growth trend
  • investment attractiveness
  • socioeconomic status
  • forecasting
  • infrastructure projects
  • real estate laws
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