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The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. write 150 words.

The charts show projections for global production by sector in 2040 and 2060. write 150 words.
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The given pie charts provide information about the changes indicators for worldwide
production
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 in six lines in 2040 and 2060. Looking from an
overall
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an
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insignificant growth is expected in
production
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 in four lines (services, manufacturing, materials, and info-com tech)
while
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 a slight drop will be in
production
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 energy and agriculture lines, in 2060. Getting back to the details
that
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it is predicted that service which has the highest
production
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, which is at 40%, among sectors, info-com tech which is at 15%, and material line, which is at 3%, will increase by just 1% in 2060. It is estimated that the manufacturing sector, which is at 31%, will hit
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34%.
In contrast
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, as opposed to 2040 and 2060,
it is clear that
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 the amount of energy will be reduced by 1%. It could be plainly viewed that the agriculture sector worldwide will be the smallest line in the around of the world in 2060. It is estimated that the crops which will be generated with
this
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 line will decline by 3%, and they generally will reach a low of 1% in 2060.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
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