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Band 5.5

A road near your home is damaged. Please write your town/city council to complain about it. In your letter •tell them who you are and where you live; •explain the nature of your complaint; •say what you would like them to do about it

Dear Sir / Madam First of all, I hope my mail finds you in
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good health, Second thing, please allow me to thank you, and your team, for making our city light and bright, but today, I am writing
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 message to complain about 2
roads
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, which are close to my home, Actually people who live here suffering, because of the bad condition of
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. My name is Alex, I am 30 years old, living in 22nd street, Brighton town, London.
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 your team are worked
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 month in
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 area,
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the job still not finished yet, so the
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,
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 I mentioned already are not good for drivers, and it
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 cause problems in future,
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, residents tend to write the same letter to your council, and the main idea is to prepare the streets, and make it them good for use.
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, we need you to study our request to
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 the new
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, and
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 to put
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up traffic
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signal
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, to avoid any accidents in the next stage.
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, I would like you to take
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 subject seriously, and take action as soon as possible. Wish you all the best Best regards

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Coherence & Cohesion
Consider organizing your thoughts more clearly, ensuring each paragraph has a single focus for better readability.
Task Achievement
A more formal tone could enhance the professionalism of your letter. Avoid casual expressions and ensure the use of proper formal greetings and sign-offs.
Task Achievement
Ensure all sentences are complete and ideas are fully developed for a stronger task response. Providing more specific details about the damaged roads could also help.
Task Achievement
Your effort to explain the situation and request specific actions from the town council is commendable. It makes your letter purposeful and actionable.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your letter demonstrates an understanding of paragraph structuring and attempts to organize the letter logically with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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