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Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled.  ​ Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples.​

#people #noise #amount
I like reading a book. When I was a little daughter I read a text. My parents have a library and when I know they were read. It was of my life light. When wake up in the morning read thing is on the table and when I sleep at night on the table, too. I did not have time that I was away from the read. And I never had time to be disappointed in my life.
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task achievement
Your essay does not address the given topic about noise and opinions on its regulation. It's important to focus on the task and discuss the topic presented.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks clear organization into paragraphs and the connection between sentences is unclear. For better coherence, structure your essay into an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, and a conclusion.
task achievement
Your essay is about the love of reading rather than discussing views on noise control. To improve, ensure that your essay provides a balanced discussion of the topic and includes your own opinion as requested.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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