The bar chart below gives information about average annual seafood consumption in Asian countries between 2002 and 2010.
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presents
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in Correct your spelling
changes
change
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the lenghth
lenghth
of Correct your spelling
length
travels
of Fix the agreement mistake
travel
childs
between 5 to 15 Correct your spelling
children
years
old via 6 diffrent
features Correct your spelling
different
during
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over
years
. Obviously
most trips were done by Add a comma
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bus
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a bus
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apply
taxi
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taxis
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during Change the spelling
favourable
thoses
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those
years
.
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distances moved by train fluctuated about
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from about
o
22 Correct your spelling
to
miles
. also
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also,
taxi
had Fix the agreement mistake
taxis
rising
and falling trend same as Correct article usage
a rising
train
. Fix the agreement mistake
trains
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, usage
of bicycles Correct article usage
the usage
lowerd
from 28 Correct your spelling
lowered
miles
to 18 miles
and less
people Change the quantifier
fewer
use
it Wrong verb form
used
while
,
it was equal Remove the comma
apply
as
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to
bus
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a bus
the bus
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had
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opposite slope.
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the
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appliance
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appliances
hightened
until 2000 and peaked Correct your spelling
heightened
tightened
in
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at
miles
but after that
it Add a comma
that,
lowerd
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lowered
whereas
it stayed in the second rank in 2020. Even so, walking falls
down and dipped in 2000 another rise Wrong verb form
fell
is
happened in Unnecessary verb
apply
next
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the next
years
. In spite of this
, it remained in
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at
overtook
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overtake
bus
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the bus
during
all times.
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at
have
fans of Verb problem
are
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the bus
bus
and in the next Fix the agreement mistake
buses
step
cars can left behind other facilities like cycling. Add a comma
step,
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new
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lives
level
leaves
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