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The chart below shows the annual water usage by different industries.

The chart below shows the annual water usage by different industries.
The chart illustrates the number of
water
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, including
groundwater
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 and public supply, used by
the
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 variety of
industries
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 in the same year.
According to
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 the figure, it can be seen that both types of
water
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is
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are
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 used by the chemical
industries
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 the most.
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, the
industries
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 which
use
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groundwater
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 and public supply the least are the machinery and the fuel/textile respectively. As it is presented, the chemicals
industries
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use
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 public supply
water
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 the most with 240. Followed by the foods and drinks
industries
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, just about 190. The
least
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last
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 public supply
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water
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of water
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 is occupied by the fuel and textiles
industries
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 only at 10.
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, the
groundwater
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 is used by the chemicals
industries
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 about 430 which is the most
compare
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compared
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 to the others that
use
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this
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 kind of
water
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. The metal
industries
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 come second place with 240. The fuel and textiles
industries
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use
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 almost the same amount of
groundwater
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, at 70 and 80. Meanwhile, the machinery uses
gound
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ground
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water
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 less, only account for 10.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, groundwater, industries, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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