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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
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 pie chart and line graph below
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the different types of
crime
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 committed in Britain and the correlation between
age
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 and
crime
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the
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in the
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 past year respectively.
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, violent crimes are the most committed and the
age
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 that
commits
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committed
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 the most
crime
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the
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in the
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 past year was around 20
years
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 old.
At slightly
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Slightly
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 less than half of the
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crime
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crimes
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 committed were violent
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crime
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crimes
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, followed closely
at
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by
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 close to a quarter of the
overall
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crime
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 were property and drug crimes. The
last
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 type of
crime
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that is
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 being committed is
at
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about one-tenth of the total crimes.
Next,
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the correlation
of
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between
age
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 and
crime
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 indicates a sharp rise from 12 to 16
years
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 old of nearly 15 times before climbing to a peak at 80000 at the
age
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 of 20. For the next 4
years
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 onwards, there was a decline to 60000 and
finally
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 to less than 20000 the next 40
years
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, years with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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