Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Several individuals believe that dangerous
should be banned by governments
others oppose that individuals should have the freedom to play all
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and activities. I would like to discuss both sides in more detail before giving my opinion. On the one hand,
it is clear that
the authorities should prevent dangerous play because they have negative effects on the physical health of many players,
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serious accidents,
, they can lead to deaths. To illustrate, in Vietnam, a young girl had a serious accident when she was climbing because it was raining and the path got slippery,
led to a result of her death.
On the other hand
, I believe that the residents should be encouraged to do all
and activities that they like because not only does it provide a diverse range of play, but it is
the best way for players to explore their abilities
as well as
their passion to find talented seeds in the
helps to increase the player’s experience.
For instance
, a person is not good at swimming but she or he may be good at climbing.
if they do not have an opportunity to try to climb, they will not discover that they are good at it. In conclusion, in
essay, I would like people to know that dangerous
should not be agreed to by the law because of their negative consequences,
as causing serious accidents and death but communities should have the freedom to do any play or activity because it motivates more people to join the
to find talented people.
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Task Response
Ensure a balance in discussing both views before presenting your opinion. You've done well in providing examples for each view, which strengthens your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to include a broader range of linking phrases and topic sentences to improve paragraph transitions and cohesion.
Task Response
In presenting your own opinion, make it explicitly clear whether you lean more towards one view over the other for a more decisive stance.
Coherence & Cohesion
Good structure with clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Task Achievement
Efficient use of examples to support your arguments.
Task Achievement
You've managed to tackle both views in a balanced manner before giving your own opinion, which is exactly what the prompt asks for.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • severe injuries
  • fatalities
  • base jumping
  • bull running
  • extreme skiing
  • safeguard
  • well-being
  • regulating
  • avoidable harm
  • healthcare costs
  • burdening
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • training
  • equipment
  • mitigated
  • personal satisfaction
  • mental health benefits
  • resilience
  • adventure
  • assess risks
  • public safety
  • unnecessary healthcare costs
  • outright bans
  • balanced approach
  • stringent safety standards
  • mandatory training sessions
  • adequately informed
  • safeguarding
  • public health
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