The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the
owners
and the
renters
who lived in England and
wales
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from 1918 to 2011.
It is clear that
,
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the number of households
in
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owned had an upward trend approximately,
while
the number of households
in
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rented showed a
down ward
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downward
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trend nearly. In the first year, most
of
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people
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the people
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rented houses and
percentage
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stood at the highest level
with
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78%
whereas
the range of
owners
had a huge difference and showed 22% which means that, they had an enormous gap in1918. From 1939 to1953 both
owners
and
renters
leveled off at 70% and 30% respectively. The percentage of house
owners
had
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followed a growth trend until 1991 by 37% of climbing
although
, the rate of
renters
experienced a noticeable
dropped
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by
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more than 30% at the same time. Between 1991 and 2001, the rate of buyers had a negligible increase
with
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less than 1%
while
it experienced a slight decrease to 65% in 2011. it is remarkable the percentage of
renters
maintained the same level at 32% from 1991 to
2001and
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2001
showed a minimal
rose
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by
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7% in 2011.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words owners, renters with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • households
  • accommodation
  • owned
  • rented
  • prevalent
  • transition period
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • analyze
  • summarize
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