The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the
owners
and the renters
who lived in England and wales
from 1918 to 2011.
Capitalize word
Wales
It is clear that
,
the number of households Remove the comma
apply
in
owned had an upward trend approximately,Change preposition
apply
while
the number of households in
rented showed a Change preposition
apply
down ward
trend nearly.
In the first year, most Correct your spelling
downward
of
Change preposition
apply
people
rented houses and Add an article
the people
percentage
stood at the highest level Correct article usage
the percentage
with
78% Change preposition
at
whereas
the range of owners
had a huge difference and showed 22% which means that, they had an enormous gap in1918.
From 1939 to1953 both owners
and renters
leveled off at 70% and 30% respectively. The percentage of house owners
had
followed a growth trend until 1991 by 37% of climbing Unnecessary verb
apply
although
, the rate of renters
experienced a noticeable dropped
Replace the word
drop
by
more than 30% at the same time.
Between 1991 and 2001, the rate of buyers had a negligible increase Change preposition
of
with
less than 1% Change preposition
of
while
it experienced a slight decrease to 65% in 2011. it is remarkable the percentage of renters
maintained the same level at 32% from 1991 to 2001and
showed a minimal Correct your spelling
2001
rose
Replace the word
rise
by
7% in 2011.Change preposition
of
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Vocabulary: Replace the words owners, renters with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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