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The pie charts below show the sources for UK tax revenue for last year and the total UK government spending for last year.

The pie charts below show the sources for UK tax revenue for last year and the total UK government spending for last year.
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The pie charts display
regarding
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the percentage source for
tax
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income
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 and spending in
UK
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the UK
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last
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 year.
Overall
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 it can be seen that
income
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tax
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 accounted for
majority
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the majority
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 of the
income
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,
whereas
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 pensions
calculated
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were calculated
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 for
most
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the most
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expense
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expenses
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. Looking in more detail, for UK
tax
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 revenue
income
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tax
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 contributed
most
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more
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for
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tax
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income
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 than others at 28%. The other categories were much smaller, national insurance which
were
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second
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the second
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 largest for
tax
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 revenue proportion at 21%,
then
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 followed by
value added
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tax
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 with little
different
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 with the latter at 17%. Others share
also
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 take a part with
amount
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the amount
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 of percentage namely 11%. There were four
tax
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 revenues,
coucil
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council
tax
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, business rates and fuel duty, which
accounting
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accounted
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 for 5%. In the meantime, pensions become
most
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 aspect
in
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 UK government outings at 20%.
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it was followed by welfare, health care and education which had similar
proportion
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proportions
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, 17%, 18% and 14% respectively.
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, general government, transport, protection, defence, interest payment on
debt
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the debt
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, and other outings spent less namely no more
7
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%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tax, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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