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The pie chart shows a group of nutritional ingredients, namely carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different categories.

The pie chart shows a group of nutritional ingredients, namely carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different categories.
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The pie charts describe a nutritional proportion range including
carbohydrates
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, protein and fat in three different groups.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
carbohydrates
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 as
nutrition
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 contributed most for all of the
diet
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 categories except
average
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the average
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diet
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.
Whereas
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, fat contributed at least
number
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a number
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 for all of the
diet
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 categories. Looking in more detail, in
average
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the average
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diet
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 group,
carbohydrates
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 and protein had
similar
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a similar
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 proportion at 40%. Meanwhile, in
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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 non and for sport,
carbohydrates
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 are calculated as
nutrition
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 took
largest
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the largest
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 composition which included in
diet
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 requirements at 50% and 80%
recpectively
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respectively
. Protein contributions, which were
a
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the
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 second largest
nutrition
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which
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apply
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are added in healthy
diet
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 non and for sport at 30% and 25% in order. The other category,
there
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apply
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was
fat
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the fat
a fat
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,
type
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the type
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 of
nutrition
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 which contributed
in least
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in the least
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 number. The
each
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apply
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total proportions for fat in different
diet
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category
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categories
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 including average, healthy and
healty-sport
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healthy-sport
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diet
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diets
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 were 20%, 20% and 15% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbohydrates, nutrition, diet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutritional ingredients
  • carbohydrates
  • protein
  • fat
  • distribution
  • percentage
  • trends
  • dietary suggestions
  • nutritional needs
  • guidelines
  • historical context
  • situational context
  • variations
  • dietary habits
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