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Some languages spoken by very few people are losing their importance and may become extinct. Is it a good or a bad development? What are the reasons for this?

#languages #people #importance #development
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There are some languages in the
world
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parleyed
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 by tiny sections of the
world
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. The significance of
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 dialects
are
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 vanishing, contributing to their possible extinction.
Its
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 a negative effect and a plethora of factors contribute to
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phenomenon
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. In the contemporary era, many reasons can
ascribe
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 to
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 development. People are trying to create a common medium of
communication
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 across the
world
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. To establish
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 an instrument,
english
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 became the most important
dialect
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. Nowadays, most of the educational and official platforms use
english
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 as a
communication
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 medium.
Thus
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, some communities around the
world
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 who practise a certain
dialect
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 are avoiding their native languages to communicate.
Apart from
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this
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, the source of these linguistical varieties
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 as the literature
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 not well-preserved. The cultural heritage is
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 the brink of extinction for
such
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 dialects.
For instance
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, when books written in
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 languages by highly qualified authors are lost, it
contribute
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 to the vanishing of the
dialect
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. Because, reading and deciphering
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 content leads to
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language development from the school days,
although
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, schools do not have
these
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 resources to continue
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communication
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 in
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 a
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Moreover
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, it has many shortcomings for the society on the whole. A myriad of cultural heritage is lost because of
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 negligence in
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the preservation
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 of
a vernaculars
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a vernacular
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. People are losing their cultural identity which is reducing the uniqueness of their community.
Consequently
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, the
world
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 seems very similar with no creativity left.
For example
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, in India, people are using
english
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 for their official works and schools which is decreasing their grasp over their vernacular tongue. It will
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 reduce their knowledge,
additionally
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, they cannot impart the knowledge to
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 next generations.
To sum up
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, vernaculars create a sense of uniqueness and pride among communities,
however
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, leverage for one
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 medium worldwide is causing
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 for other linguistic varieties.
Similarly
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, there is
reckless
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the reckless
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 attitude towards literature and culture. In a nutshell,
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it's
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 a bad trend and can lead to
extinction
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the extinction
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 of many vernaculars.
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task achievement
You've managed to address both the reasons and implications of language extinction effectively, showing a good understanding of the essay topic.
language
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