The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown leisure activities of Australian children

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown leisure activities of Australian children
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indicate
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leisure
activities
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of
boys
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and
girls
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between ages 5 and 14 with five distinct in
Australian
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Australia
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.
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, watching TV or videos are greatest lovely kind of
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activities
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activity
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for both genders. Contra
skatebording
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skateboarding
or
rolleblading
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rollerblading
are
most
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lower figure.
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, the number of watching TV and
rolleblading
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rollerblading
are elite for both
of
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boys
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and
girls
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aged
of
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5 and 14 chosen by all participle. Bike riding and Electronic or computer games are similar
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for every
person
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aged
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. Bike riding was selected as a popular activity
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by appoxiemetely
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appoxiemetely
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approximately
75% of
boys
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and for a little
while
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of
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60% of
girls
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. Meanwhile, the
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figures
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of
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for
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electronic
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electronics
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and
computer
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computers
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are 80%and 60% respectively. Despite
of
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the fact,
sketbording
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skateboarding
or rollerblading and
Art
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Arts
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and
craft
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crafts
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wre
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were
are
the most leat favour
actictivities
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activities
compared to others. We can see
sketbording
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skateboarding
and rollerblading
preffered
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preferred
activities
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of
boys
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appoxiemetely
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approximately
38% chose
it
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them
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while
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just 22% of
girls
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preffered
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preferred
it
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them
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. Same as arts and
craft
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crafts
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can
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shows 55% of
girls
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enjoyed
with
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this
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this activity
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activities
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but only 25% of
boys
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like
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liked
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it
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them
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, boys, girls with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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