Many people today would argue that cinemas are becoming irrelevant due to new streaming services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
nowadays, There
is
a lot of Correct subject-verb agreement
are
alternative
to Change to a plural noun
alternatives
watch
shows . Where are going to watch in cinemas or streaming Wrong verb form
watching
services
, I believe that watching on streaming much be cheaper and better than watching in theatres
.
To begin
with, watching shows on streaming services
is much cheaper than going to theatres
. Nowadays, streaming services
are available at much more affordable. For instance
, the Disney+Hostar streaming service is available at just 10$ per month, which is the cost of a single show over many cinemas. Streaming app subscriptions are available at a lower price if we purchase them along with
sim
plan. Correct article usage
a sim
For example
, Obtus offer you new
mobile plan with Correct article usage
a new
Correct article usage
a netfix
netfix
stream to use for 1 year for free With the cost of a single movie, we can keep watching many shows for the entire year. Correct your spelling
Netflix
Hence
, watching over streaming platforms saves money and is better than theatres
.
Moreover
, it is more comfortable to watch over streaming apps than in theatres
. We can manage any show by sitting on the type of chair we like or on the bed. We are no longer bound by the time we watch on streaming apps. Hence
we can watch it whenever we want. In my opinion, I can play, pause, rewind, forward, increase and decrease in speed. For example
, if I love some
movie but don’t know that language well, it Correct determiner usage
a
also
help
me to learn Change the verb form
helps
new
language Add an article
a new
that
Correct word choice
so that
i
can reduce the speed to slowly more Change the capitalization
I
unstand
Correct your spelling
understand
movie
.
In conclusion , I Fix the agreement mistake
movies
completly
agree Correct your spelling
completely
that
streaming Change preposition
with
services
. it will increasing popular
than Replace the word
popularity
theatres
also
save time and money to watch in streaming apps. Correct word choice
and also
i
support to use Change the capitalization
I
streaming
Change preposition
of streaming
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