Many people today would argue that cinemas are becoming irrelevant due to new streaming services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

nowadays, There
is
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a lot of
alternative
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to
watch
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shows . Where are going to watch in cinemas or streaming
services
, I believe that watching on streaming much be cheaper and better than watching in
theatres
.
To begin
with, watching shows on streaming
services
is much cheaper than going to
theatres
. Nowadays, streaming
services
are available at much more affordable.
For instance
, the Disney+Hostar streaming service is available at just 10$ per month, which is the cost of a single show over many cinemas. Streaming app subscriptions are available at a lower price if we purchase them
along with
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plan.
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, Obtus offer you
new
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mobile plan with
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a netfix
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netfix
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Netflix
stream to use for 1 year for free With the cost of a single movie, we can keep watching many shows for the entire year.
Hence
, watching over streaming platforms saves money and is better than
theatres
.
Moreover
, it is more comfortable to watch over streaming apps than in
theatres
. We can manage any show by sitting on the type of chair we like or on the bed. We are no longer bound by the time we watch on streaming apps.
Hence
we can watch it whenever we want. In my opinion, I can play, pause, rewind, forward, increase and decrease in speed.
For example
, if I love
some
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a
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movie but don’t know that language well, it
also
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me to learn
new
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language
that
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so that
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i
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can reduce the speed to slowly more
unstand
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understand
movie
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movies
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. In conclusion , I
completly
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completely
agree
that
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with
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streaming
services
. it will increasing
popular
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than
theatres
also
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and also
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save time and money to watch in streaming apps.
i
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I
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support to use
streaming
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of streaming
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