The bar chart below shows the US top 10 processed food export markets for last year and six years ago.

Today we will look at statistics for 1992. Statistics can see employees and self-employed their gender and their occupation. The most popular activity among

female

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females

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clerical or related makes up 31

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percent

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of the total, compared to

men

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it's a big difference for

men

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activity takes up only six

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percent

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is another popular activity among

women

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which is 29

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percent

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managerial and professional.

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time,

women

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lag slightly behind

men

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field because the share of

men

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in managerial and professional positions is

thirty six

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percent

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. If we turn to the statistics for

men

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it is clear that

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they are higher here

manual

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field accounts for 52%. If we compare

men

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and

women

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women

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are more represented

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non manual

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jobs because their share in managerial and professional positions is

twenty nine

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per cent , in clerical and related positions 31%, and in other categories nine

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. The least popular occupation among both

men

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and

women

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is general labourers, which make up only 1-2% .Craft or similar jobs are not popular among

women

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but are much more common among

men

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