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our friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email, describe where you lived when you were a student at the university recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation Write at least 150 words.

#friend #place #course #university #advice #email #student #accommodation #mistakes #students
Dear Treshie, I am excited to hear that you got admission to your
Masters
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 programme at
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Trinity Western University. As a former student, I am thrilled to give you some advice on finding the best
place
 for you to live. Finding accommodation close to the University is not easy, but it is not impossible.
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 I was studying I lived 10 minutes walk away
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 saved me a lot of time travelling on the road. It was a single room with a shared living room and a kitchen which cost me $ 850 per month. With my experience, I believe you will find the best accommodation through
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facebook
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 marketplace and Craigslist.
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, you can share a message on our local community groups seeking
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a
place
. I am sure that there will be plenty of Sri Lankans who are looking to provide accommodation for new immigrants. I must warn you that there will be a lot of scams on these websites. You need to be extremely careful. Make sure not to pay any advance or transfer a deposit without visiting the
place
. If you need more details or help in finding a
place
, please call me at 475884521. Looking forward to hearing from you soon, Best wishes, Madonna
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task response
Consider being more explicit about how your own living situation reflects on what is optimal or not for a newcomer. While you shared your experience, connecting this directly to what your friend should or should not do could enhance the advice.
coherence cohesion
Try to vary your sentence structures more for added fluency. While your email flows well, greater variety in sentence types can improve overall readability.
coherence cohesion
Always double-check for typos or grammatical slips, such as missing articles ('a Master's programme') and correct spacing after periods and commas.
task achievement
You effectively address the key points of the prompt by describing your living situation, recommending search methods, and warning against potential mistakes.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of your email is clear, with distinct sections for each piece of advice that makes it easy to follow.
task response
Providing your contact number at the end is a thoughtful touch that adds a real sense of willingness to assist further.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • dormitories
  • rental agreements
  • house-hunting
  • budgeting
  • commute
  • utilities
  • security deposit
  • lease
  • proximity
  • amenities
  • landlord
  • tenant rights
  • real estate agent
  • furnished/unfurnished
  • flatmates
  • on-campus/off-campus living
  • viewings
  • public transportation
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