The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map conveys the
two
locations in the centre of Paris to choose where the new restaurant will be located.
Overall
, there is only one river called 'The Seine
river
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River
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' and
the
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one metro station,
two
banks; the right and the left, three bridges; the Bir-Hakeim bridge, the Debilly footbridge and the
lena
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Lena
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platform,
two
parks
at
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on
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the
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each side of
banks
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the banks
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, and five sightseeings which are popular to visit, as sports centre, the art gallery, the Eiffel tower, the aquarium and the Maritime museum. The first place stands at the west part of the right bank and near the left side of the park
that
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which
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is located on the same bank.
Also
,
the
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option number one is between
two
bridges
as
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Bir-Hakeim and Lena.
Moreover
,
this
variant is not far from
museum
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the museum
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, where the number of visitors
are
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is
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the
most
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highest
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in
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on
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this
side. The second future eating house stands on the left bank, extra nearly to the Eiffel
tower
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Tower
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.
Additionally
,
this
point is going to be popular among people who want to enjoy the Eiffel Tower and eat after
such
emotions.
Also
, there is a metro station that will be very
convinient
Correct your spelling
convenient
for restaurant comers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words two with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • prime location
  • pedestrian traffic
  • commercial area
  • accessibility
  • landmarks
  • tourist attractions
  • local clientele
  • dining establishment
  • culinary scene
  • footfall
  • lease terms
  • business district
  • market analysis
  • target demographic
  • urban planning
  • zoning regulations
  • competitive analysis
  • public transport links
  • patronage
  • culinary niche
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