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the diagram below show the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram below show the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the changes in the floor plan in a central public library between 20 years ago and the present.
According to
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 the picture,
it is clear that
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 a majority of the
plan
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plans
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 have changed,
However
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, it is not only the proposes for each
room
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, but the
room
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 has
also
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 been expanded. At
the
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first glance, the two tables and several chairs that used to be located in the middle of the library were removed. On the left side of
this
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 facility, there was an expansion of CDs, videos and computer games
and
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changed
it
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into
the
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a
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room
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 for storytelling events which included 2 more added sofas and fiction
books
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 for children. The aisle in the middle was adjusted from adult fiction
books
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into
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to
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 all reference
books
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. The reading
room
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 from the past became a computer
room
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. On the right-hand side of the plan, A Lecture
room
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 replaced the
room
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 that was keeping children's
books
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. An adult non-fiction
books
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 area was rearranged and became
adult
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an adult
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 fiction
books
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 area with an information desk and some self-service machines. An enquiry desk was demolished and replaced by a new cafe.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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