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The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below gives information about population in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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A glance at the table provides demographic
datas
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data
 in
Australza
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Australia
 and
Malaysia
 in 1980 and 2002.
Overall
, the vast majority of
Australian
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the Australian
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population
 was female
in
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 the given time, whilst that of
Malaysian
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the Malaysian
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population
 was male.
Besides
, the total
population
 of the two countries both increased.
According to
 the information shown in the table, the total
population
 of
Malaysia
 grew almost two times from 13.1
million
people
 to 24.3
million
people
 during the 22 years,
while
 that of Australia rose from 14.1
million
people
 to 19.6
million
people
.
Moreover
, the female
population
 of Australia was superior to the male one by 50.1% and 49,9% which was
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extremely
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 contrast to the situation in
Malaysia
 as the male proportion was 50.3% in 1980 and 50.6% In 2002. When it comes to the birth rate, the birth rate of Australia slightly increased from 1.2% to 1.3% ,
however
, that of
Malaysia
 decreased
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1
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% from 3.2% to 2.2%,
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