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An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to find somewhere for your friend to stay give advice about what to do and see in your area give information about what clothes to bring

#friend #holiday #region #information #advice #offer #area #clothes
Dear
Aadm
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Adam
, Hope You're doing well. I have come to know that you coming to my country in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 holidays. It's a great honour for me to
spending
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 some days with you. Please let me know, your
arrieval
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arrival
 date so that I
could
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can
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 manage
a
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apply
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suitable
accomodation
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accommodation
 for you. Do not worry about
for
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accomodation
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accommodation
 because it is my duty to
locate
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 a place where you can spend time with ease and
convient
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convenient
. I have some
impotant
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important
 tips for your staying duration. Please
beaware
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be aware
 of any unknown
peron
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person
 and try to
avoide
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avoid
 too much involvement with
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apply
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people whom you don't know.
Furthermore
, There is no need to be afraid
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of
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any thing
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anything
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 because usually people are
cooprative
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cooperative
 but there always be a chance to face
other wise
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otherwise
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situation
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. Please bring some warm clothes with
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you because
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 when you
will
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arrive
arrieve
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arrive
,
winter
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the winter
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 season will be on
it's
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its
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peack
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peak
back
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at least
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you atleast
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atleast
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at least
 a
weak
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week
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before
befor
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before
you
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your
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 arrival so that I
could
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can
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 manage easily. Take care and hope that your tour will be memorable for you. Yours Sincerely, Kunwar
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Grammar & Spelling
Consider checking spelling, especially proper names (e.g., 'Aadm' should be 'Adam') and common words (e.g., 'arrieval', 'accomodation', 'peack').
Punctuation & Spacing
Be cautious with spacing and punctuation; ensure there's a space after commas and periods, and avoid splitting words unnecessarily.
Vocabulary & Sentence Structure
Try to use a more varied vocabulary and complex sentence structures to improve expressiveness and formality.
Paragraph Development & Cohesion
To enhance coherence, ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and develops logically from one to the next, with proper use of linking words.
Organization
Your letter is clearly organized into paragraphs, each dealing with different aspects of the advice to your friend which aids readability.
Tone
You used a polite and friendly tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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