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'You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant Wilte at least 150 words

'You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant Wilte at least 150 words
#minutes #floor #plan #library #years #summarise #information #features #comparisons #wilte
Seeing in first sight, through twenty years, the
library
have
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has
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remain
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remained
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 the same concept
which
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 the floor is organized into four main categories and is placed in four corners.
However
, looking at each specific
areas
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area
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, there are some differences: some old subjects are replaced with new ones, and some have switched to a different corner. Comparing the two pictures, the enquiry desk which is in the
right down
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 corner,
have
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 been replaced with
Cafe
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a Cafe
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, and the
library
 offers the same service
by
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 the self-service machine and the information desk near the Cafe.
Also
, on the left
down
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apply
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side, you can see the reading room
have
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 been replaced by
computer
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 room since people obtain information through
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 and other online channels.
More
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, the children’s
book
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books
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 were switched from
right
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the right
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 upper corner to
left
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the left
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 upper,
while
 they removed the CD and video section from the
library
. There are
also
 some details that you would notice if you look closely.
For example
, the directions
which
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 the doors are opened are redesigned, and they started to provide sofas in the
children
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children's
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 section. It seems like the
library
 has gone through some renovations to satisfy the different needs
from
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of
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 the city.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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