Write about the following topic: In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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more developed, more people would desert suburbs and move into urban cities. In my personal opinion,

this

is a negative development. There is no doubt that living in urban areas

have

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its own

advantage

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.

for instance

, more

opportunity

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opportunities

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on

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career wide

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,

all

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kinds of resources are more reachable,

also

for safety reasons and medical reasons it is more reasonable to choose

city

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over

suburbs

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.

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, speaking

in

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personal experience, there

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also

abundant

shortcoming

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that I believe people could easily

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.

First,

although

development brings prosperity,

but

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it

also

comes with other costs. The

pollutions

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pollution

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around city areas

are

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substantially worse result

from

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the density of

population

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the population

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living inside. It not only affects health but

also

environment

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itself. Especially the temperature

rises

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so drastically in urban places these days has caused the greenhouse effect even more severe. Other than physical impacts, mental pressure is usually underestimated In

this

situation

due to

its immeasurable

characteristic

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.

Me

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personally,

are

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often overwhelmed by the fast pace and how effectively the information

have

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exchanged. Despite

these

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acceleration has contributed to

humankind in

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humankind's

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progress and breakthroughs, it still remains a question mark to me

that

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whether it is

a

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right direction. I believe

this

uneven population situation will eventually result in other issues in the future, but it seems like for now

this

changing

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is inevitable.