Many offices authorities impose a restriction on smoking within the office premises. Some governments have even banned smoking in all public places. This is a good idea but it takes away some of our freedom. Do you agree or disagree that this is the right of course. Give reason for your opinion.

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in the offices or in their surroundings

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for many companies.

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,

Goverment

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government

has been acting strongly towards

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issue and prohibiting the use of cigarettes in public spaces.

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other people believe it is taking away our free will,

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think is good for everyone, so

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strongly agree with

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initiative.

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, smoking is a detrimental habit for our

health

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not practice

this

horrible practice.

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, scientifically it is related

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deeper problems in our system.

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, changing the morphology of lung tissues

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to

a

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lung cancer

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cholesterol and triglycerides

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as a result

of cardiovascular diseases just like the main causes of smoking. From my perspective, it is beneficial to address

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matter

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rules to keep

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or keep away the healthy population who are against

of

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this

bad habit.

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, it is beneficial for the country because the

health

system will not

be

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collapse if they

are having

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more unhealthy people

in

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their premises or

giving

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long lasting

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treatments who in their moment

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the opportunity to

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a right

desicion

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decision

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, smoking yes,

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is

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personal choice

however

, it can

affects

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others.

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can be a

long term

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problem in the

health

care sector where can have to maintain those people, not only with medicines or treatment but

also

in hospitals

as a consequence

deteriorating the

health

system.