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The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.

The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.
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The line graph illustrates data from four different nations that show the manufacturing of
fruit
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 over a 40-year time period; 1970 to 2010.
Overall
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, the majority of produced
fruit
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 occurred in Spain for the entire time period,
whereas
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 Germany produced the least amount of
fruit
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. The most notable observation upon first analysing the information is that
fruit
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 production was predominantly held by Spain for over 40 years.
Initially
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, Spain produced about 5.7
million
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tonnes
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 of
fruit
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, which increased from 1970 to 1980, whereafter it gradually declined to an average of 5.1
million
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tonnes
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 in 2010.
Moreover
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, Turkey and France are positively correlated as both indicated continuous growth and manufacturing improved by about 2%, respectively. Given
this
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, it is evident that France's production fluctuated throughout the years.
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, a minority of
fruit
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 was produced in Germany, which declined from 1970 to 2010 with over 1.2
million
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tonnes
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,
however
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, production was steady between 1989 and 1995 at 1.5
million
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tonnes
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruit, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • produce
  • trends
  • decrease/increase
  • production
  • peak
  • fluctuation
  • stability
  • volatility
  • significant
  • milestone
  • conjecture
  • harvest
  • agricultural
  • yield
  • decade
  • data representation
  • timespan
  • graph analysis
  • comparative
  • rankings
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