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You experienced an incident on public transport that caused you distress. Write a letter to the manager of the public transport company. In your letter: describe the incident;explain how this incident affected you and suggest what could be done about it

#incident #transport #distress #manager #company
Dear MadamI am writing
for
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 you
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regarding
regardan
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regardan this
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,I usually
utiliaz
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utilise
 public transport.The reason I am writing to you
,
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 is the regarding object to gain experience
to utilize
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in utilizing
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 public transport.
A
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 amicable friend
persuade
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my
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me
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 to make use of
bus
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the bus
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 for went to work on 12 March 2015 at 8 a.m. Regrettably steersman
bus’s
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buses do
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donot
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do not
 conform to rigid
ruls
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rules
 and
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regulations
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regulation
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regulations
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,
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apply
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and
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exceed the speed limit and jump the light. I proposed that he should
decreas
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decrease
 speed but he evaded his responsibility and he postponed cases
collaide
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collide
collided
 with
car
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the car
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. It caused increased stress
in
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for
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 all
passengers
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the passengers
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 and he is very impolite, he
dont
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doesn't
 follow
me
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 advice i have a proposition for you,you should
boom
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boost
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 job performance through
educations
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education
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 fields like
:
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 Compliance with the rules,punctuality and … by an acceptable educational
center
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Language Clarity
Use clear and straightforward language for better understanding.
Letter Format
Remember to use proper greetings and closings in formal letters.
Structure
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each discussing a specific aspect of your concern.
Formality
Address the recipient properly to maintain the formality of the letter.
Detail
You've described the incident in detail, which is crucial for understanding the scenario.
Constructive Suggestion
Your suggestion for improvement shows proactive thinking.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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