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The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The graph
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 the price of water in different parts of Australia. It gives
an information
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information
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 about usage and
average
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the average
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 bill per house. To start with, Perth has the highest cost and Melbourne has the lowest. Adelaide, the number one city on the table has numbers 0.42 and 1.00 in
first
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 two columns, the medium cost per house is 312 dollars.
However
, the proportion of Melbourne is
smaler
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smaller
 than in Sydney, their numbers of usage are the same in each place. The second difference between them is
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 average bill.
Next,
Brisbane
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in Brisbane
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 the two indicators of usage change per kiloliter are on the same level, but the price is 310 dollars.
In addition
, Perth has 0.42 and 1.50 in the first place and 332 dollars, which is the biggest payment in the table. Summarising all
data
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, we see that
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Melbourne has the cheapest bill for water in Australia and Perth is the most expensive one.
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